Y6 Spring term gallery and general feedback

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 Family Member Description
A Y6 Submission of the Family Member Description 
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How do you know if your writing is successful?

Some tips:

  • Read your work out loud: you may spot where missing punctuation marks need to be added, or if you stumble over your sentences, you might need to improve your word order or use of grammar. Listen to the flow of your writing. Does it have a nice rhythm? If not, how could you improve it? Would adding fronted adverbials or using a variety of different conjunctions make a difference?
  • Read your work to someone. Ask them to be a friendly critic. What did they like? Could they name one thing for you to improve? Here is the fastest way to find out if you have done well in your writing: after reading your work to someone, see if they have a smile on their face.

When we look at your writing, we are looking for accuracy in your grammar and punctuation, but most importantly we are looking for pieces of writing that are enjoyable to read, where you, the writer, have tried really hard to connect with the reader. After reading the submissions for this week, we have read many fantastic pieces of writing and have very achy cheeks. Keep up the good work. Lastly, please take the time to enjoy the wonderful piece of writing opposite.

Family Member Description
It has been great to see the fantastic pieces of writing that we have received in the Y6@elystjohns.cambs.sch.uk inbox. We have enjoyed reading all them and finding out about different family members - across all the writing, there was plenty of humour and affection. This was great to see. The choice of details shared and how these were shared in well written sentences meant that the quality of the writing was very high.
 
We have chosen this piece of work because we feel it is a good representation of the good quality of work shared with us. We liked how neatly it was presented; how the planning was used; and how you get a really good sense of the person being described and the relationship they share with the author.
 
For some of you, we have spotted a few things to work on:
Correct spelling mistakes
Join your handwriting   
Spring term gallery
As ever, our Year 6 children have risen to the challenge and worked really hard, both in school and at home.
Here are pieces of work from this term. We are really impressed. Well done everyone!
Wasps and beetles
Working on the skills we acquired when drawing the wolves before Christmas, we looked at a detailed picture of a wasp, drawn in pen. We had a go and then tried a rhinoceros beetle. The tricky thing we found  was finding a way to show texture and shape when you have just one shade of black ink.
Y6 Healthy Selfies!
A message from the Year 6 team about remote learning.